- sitting in the car
- scenery (unreal, out of this world)
- something happens in the scenery and main character cannot interact with it; character is forced to watch.
- watch what? car crash.
- Character notices the way the cars crumble on impact, the way the windows shatter in a million pieces, the moment when the airbags pop out
- realises that there were no people driving the cars, they were empty
- finds it strange, and is about to ask the driver what had happened.
- driver has vanished and the character is shocked and sees that he's driving right to another car opposite him and about to crash.
- cannot move due to magic cast by driver.
Trees rushed by, unusual trees, trees that were an unusual shape and an unusual colour. He gazed out of the window, trying to make sense of what was happening in the outside world. Tried to make sense of it all, but found out that he couldn't. So he just watched. Watched the outside world change colours and shapes in ways that one wouldn't expect. As he was watching he noticed two cars on the other side of the road. They rushed towards each other, battling which one would be the first to swerve away from the inevitable collision. He started to get nervous, fiddling with his hands and leaning towards the window to see how the battle between the cars would end. The cars kept coming closer and closer and his hands started moving faster and faster. His eyes flashed forward and back between the cars. Blue car, red car. Blue car, red car. Blue, red, blue, red. Time seemed to slow down, playing the crash in perfect slow motion. He saw the way the metal of the cars crumbled neatly upon impact, how it folded as if they had done this before. The glass turned from transparent to a white with a blue-green tint, breakin in tiny little pieces that held each other together. How it then as if timed, the glass exploded. The way the light shone beautifully on the raining glass. He suddenly felt hot and uneasy, sweat started to form on his forehead. His eyes scanned the wrecks. Where are the passengers? Are they lying on the ground, their guts spilling out? A numb feeling began creeping up his body; there were no passengers. No one was lying on the ground wailing and screaming. He turned to his driver,"What happened? No one was driv-" and cut himself off, shock displaying on his features. Driver, gone. Vanished into thin air. Panic wrapped around him like a blanket as he saw another car speeding his way.
-Paragraphs?
ReplyDelete-This is more of an action story than a contemplative one...
This is a descriptive piece of writing. Its interesting. But it would be easier to read if you put paragraphs..
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